Eclipse
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It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time.
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Post by Eclipse on Feb 29, 2004 15:23:43 GMT -5
This Empty Silence
This virulent silence awakens me; beckons me Here to this place I can hardly seem to find. In the middle of a dismal night, ceasing dreams not So entertaining, just more bleak messages in my head.
Everything; something; someone shouldn’t be here. Making themselves stand out against the dark. Pretending to be something, so uninvited. Taking up the space of someone who deserves, they’ll find You, and point you out with knobby fingers.
Say what you mean and let it be. I will go on listening and charade. Letting you see, that maybe I am something. Even though I can still hear your remarks. Netting a web of doubt around my face. Can’t I ever be rid of this silence; because Everything here is so cold.
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Post by kemleth on Feb 29, 2004 15:37:32 GMT -5
Another great write! I liked most of the end there, goes hand in hand with I see in my daily life. I completely understand the silence being an issue. I can't sleep if I don't have music going. I enjoied relating to this post!
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Post by SilverEyes on Feb 29, 2004 16:47:11 GMT -5
I see two meanings. One, silence is something that is a bother. Two, the people you talk to never say anything worth while. It's like everything said is empty air. Interesting write.
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Eclipse
Apprentice
It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time.
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Post by Eclipse on Feb 29, 2004 19:11:20 GMT -5
thank you for the replies. ^.^
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Post by richie on Feb 29, 2004 19:25:16 GMT -5
I liked this too, profond words and a sense of place in the poem from the start, with great imagery really fine writing regards Richie.
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 29, 2004 21:06:27 GMT -5
i really enjoyed this...music is my life, so i'm always surrounded by anything but silence, and actually am uncomfortable in silence...wonderful write!
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sweetest17sin
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don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile!
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Post by sweetest17sin on Mar 1, 2004 0:32:32 GMT -5
nice job!
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