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Alex'z Death Chic
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Hurt Feb 28, 2004 8:59:05 GMT -5

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Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Feb 28, 2004 8:59:05 GMT -5

It's not really good coz of the rhymes but hey, I was depressed. This is based on truth so I really feel a certain attachment to this.

Your words were filled with poison
with each of them piercing my heart
I know you probably wouldn't care
but I'm lonely when we're apart

I can't blame you for the things you did
I can't blame you for the words you've said
I guess nothing won't get you back
Not even the million tears I've shed

This is all my fault, this is all because of me
I never gave a sh*t, I just threw you aside
became too blind to notice your pain
Too blind to not see you crying inside

You've always been there for me
Always the saviour while I was the villain
Taken you for granted and treated you like crap
Never even cared if I caused you any pain

I can't help but feel what your feeling right now
Guilt has taken control over me with no one to save me
No one can rescue me now, not even you
I've past that boundary and gone past my sanity

I know that you've been crying over me
Your tears filled with such innocence and pain
I love you so much it aches me to see you this way
when your eyes look at me with hurt and disdain

I can't stand to see you hurt because of me
So sorry, I never meant to be so bad
I was a b*tch to treat you that way
I'm so sorry I made you sad...

Last Edit: Feb 29, 2004 0:39:45 GMT -5 by Alex'z Death Chic

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richie Virtuoso Posts: 302	Hurt Feb 28, 2004 11:05:21 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by richie on Feb 28, 2004 11:05:21 GMT -5 I think you have real talent, I know you are expresing your poetry in different ways which is a good thing, when you find the way you wish to go then we all better look out. excellent Richie.
	from childhood's hour I have not been as others were-I have not seen as others saw-I could not bring my passions from a common spring from the same sourse I have not taken my sorrow: I could not awaken my heart to joy at the same tone and all I loved I loved alone.

SilverEyes Poet Laureate Silver eyes crying crimson tears. Posts: 609	Hurt Feb 28, 2004 15:04:31 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by SilverEyes on Feb 28, 2004 15:04:31 GMT -5 A tragically, beautiful write. I hope you two can reconcile.
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Hurt Feb 28, 2004 15:05:01 GMT -5

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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 28, 2004 15:05:01 GMT -5

i don't know why you think this poem is not so good...i think it's wonderful...i write some of the best poetry when i'm depressed...in fact most of my poetry was written while i was depressed....anyway...this is a wonderful piece...i can feel the sadness and see the pain ...great job!

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sweetest17sin Virtuoso don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile! Posts: 252	Hurt Mar 1, 2004 0:28:56 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by sweetest17sin on Mar 1, 2004 0:28:56 GMT -5 who cares about the ryhmes. poetry is supposed to be about expressing yourself, and i think you did a wonderful job at that. nice job!
	somewhere there's someone who dreams of your smile and finds in your presence that life is worthwhile, so when you are lonely remember it's true; somebody, somewhere is thinking of you!

Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Feb 28, 2004 8:59:05 GMT -5

Post by richie on Feb 28, 2004 11:05:21 GMT -5

Post by SilverEyes on Feb 28, 2004 15:04:31 GMT -5

Post by bloodredtears on Feb 28, 2004 15:05:01 GMT -5

Post by sweetest17sin on Mar 1, 2004 0:28:56 GMT -5