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abuse
Feb 15, 2004 21:34:38 GMT -5
Post by alwayshere on Feb 15, 2004 21:34:38 GMT -5
post-traumatic-current stress
they judge you more
and love you less
painful triggers
boring through
kill any joy that's left in you
vulnerable, misunderstood
and you believe
that you're no good
they won't stop till you confess
you're not in pain
you're just a mess
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Chaotic_Thetis
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Bleed me! For i have witnessed yet remained silent.Slay me! For i had your love and kept it.
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abuse
Feb 16, 2004 4:55:24 GMT -5
Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Feb 16, 2004 4:55:24 GMT -5
I rather liked that, short, simplistic with it's own underlying complexities, and the rhyme at the end of each stanza added to poem in a positive way. Nicely written ^_^
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amberputis
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~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
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abuse
Feb 16, 2004 11:10:13 GMT -5
Post by amberputis on Feb 16, 2004 11:10:13 GMT -5
I too enjoyed this, This had great, simple rhymes which just makes this better understood, wonderful write
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abuse
Feb 16, 2004 13:22:12 GMT -5
Post by HELICAL on Feb 16, 2004 13:22:12 GMT -5
Nice flow. Interesting subject matter.
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sweetest17sin
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don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile!
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abuse
Feb 16, 2004 16:26:11 GMT -5
Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 16, 2004 16:26:11 GMT -5
yeah, i agree, that was really good!
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abuse
Feb 16, 2004 17:16:34 GMT -5
Post by SilverEyes on Feb 16, 2004 17:16:34 GMT -5
Nice write. It has a simplistic form and an interesting message that adds to the overall quality of the poem.
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Eclipse
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It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time.
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abuse
Feb 16, 2004 19:46:23 GMT -5
Post by Eclipse on Feb 16, 2004 19:46:23 GMT -5
I liked how the short stanzas gave way to rhyme. it was really simply but very well done. Nice write.
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abuse
Feb 19, 2004 7:53:39 GMT -5
Post by richie on Feb 19, 2004 7:53:39 GMT -5
alwayshere,
this is good writing I enjoyed reading it.
regards Richie.
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Wolf
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In the end, we will remember not the words of our enemies, but the silence of our friends.
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abuse
Feb 21, 2004 2:17:05 GMT -5
Post by Wolf on Feb 21, 2004 2:17:05 GMT -5
Whew, alwayshere; you got that absolutely right... anything they can to avoid addressing ones pains, anything they can do to avoid having to show some care, some empathy; it's easier for them to blame the sufferer, to medicate and label the survivor into submission.
This is beautifully, bitingly done; and a scathingly accurate assessment of the professionals - well done, alwayshere; very well done.
Thank You;
Wolf
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