sweetest17sin
Virtuoso
don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile!
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Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 12, 2004 1:28:00 GMT -5
i don't understand the tears; why they fall from my eyes
i don't understand my sadness; why i wanna say goodbye
i don't understand why he bothers me; after all, i have him
i don't understand exactly what happened; what did i do to him
i don't understand this life; why i always feel lonely inside
i don't understand how i make it; where does the pain hide
i don't understand this one bit; am i really that bad of a girl
i don't understand what it's me; why do i suffer alone in this world
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 12, 2004 10:23:24 GMT -5
i sometimes wonder why i suffer so much...this is good poem...but you're not alone in your suffering...i learned that long ago...there is always someone who has gone through just as much or worse! good rhythm here...good job!
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Post by SilverEyes on Feb 13, 2004 16:02:43 GMT -5
I can really relate to this poem, especially, the last line. Great write.
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amberputis
Virtuoso
~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
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Post by amberputis on Feb 14, 2004 17:49:02 GMT -5
again i can realte and again i am once again a fan of one of your many poems!
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Chaotic_Thetis
Apprentice
Bleed me! For i have witnessed yet remained silent.Slay me! For i had your love and kept it.
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Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Feb 15, 2004 13:07:31 GMT -5
I think the repition worked well in this piece, not too strained and nicely laid out.
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sweetest17sin
Virtuoso
don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile!
Posts: 252
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Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 15, 2004 20:56:14 GMT -5
thanks guys! do i just have really good endings silvereyes...lol...you always love my endings! i take that as a compliment though because i always want to open and end strong and this is letting me know i must be doing pretty well! thanks!
to everyone else...i don't feel this way anymore. at times do i guess, but for the most part, i am no longer depressed. i just wanted to share some of my stuff w/ the people who are because when i was, reading other peoples things helped me to know that i was not alone. if anyone ever needs anything feel free to contact me!
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