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Post by Tania on Feb 5, 2004 17:45:25 GMT -5
It is quiet now and all the noise has dulled And the images of stark reality blunted By sleep and tears and self-destruction After the pain has been wrought out Like old people not wanted Staring at nothing bt the sky Blue and Hot Seeing shapes of pastes tht have evolved in the minds eye Seeing nothing and seeing everything yet learning To cope With loss of self Lack of wisdom And enforced logicality To seem orientated in this world of technology, instant emotion and instant loss The noise is dull the dream has died And the rainbow has faded
Tania
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Post by John Barnett on Feb 5, 2004 17:50:09 GMT -5
Good job
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 5, 2004 19:57:34 GMT -5
i really enjoyed this piece...it quite conveyed a great message! reminds me of a loss of innocence...good job!
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Post by SilverEyes on Feb 5, 2004 20:16:02 GMT -5
Wow...I'm speechless.
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Post by Tania on Feb 8, 2004 1:35:52 GMT -5
Thank you very much for your wonderful comments about my poems. Tania
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Post by leash on Feb 12, 2004 13:40:13 GMT -5
excellent work. i really liked the imagery in this piece. you have a very interesting style.. i look forward to reading more.
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sweetest17sin
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don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile!
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Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 15, 2004 21:09:29 GMT -5
you have a really different, enjoyable style of writing. keep it up!
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