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Post by DeadlySilence on Apr 10, 2004 19:56:27 GMT -5
I’m so sick
Of all the empty promises.
I don’t know who to believe,
So I’ve chosen to believe -
NO ONE!
I’m so sick
Of filling my heart with hope
Only so you can let me down
And break my heart, again.
Empty promise after empty promise is made,
But no one sees the pain caused.
My heart is broken,
But my eyes aren’t crying,
Cuz I don’t think you care to see.
Although I wish people cared
And seen the pain caused
By another empty promise.
Sometimes I wish I had a reason
To truly believe, but I don’t.
3-23-2004
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Post by ::..::FoX::..:: on Apr 12, 2004 18:43:52 GMT -5
CJ, this was very good, I like some of the repition you used here, nice work.
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Post by T.J. Barber on Apr 12, 2004 20:01:10 GMT -5
Yes, the repitition was very complexive. It has structure and a great frame. Good Job CJ!
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Post by DeadlySilence on Apr 12, 2004 23:26:53 GMT -5
Thank you, Scott!
Thank you, TJ!
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NeverMore
Virtuoso
Beethoven Looking f*g
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Post by NeverMore on Apr 16, 2004 14:35:32 GMT -5
yet another feeling poem that hit me in several ways... I will say I really enjoyed it.
A comment comes to mind on the feeling of the poem... one good thing about knowing empty promises, when the not empty ones come, you may be able to see them.
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Post by DeadlySilence on Apr 16, 2004 14:40:59 GMT -5
NeverMore-
You're prolly right about the seeing the real promise.
Thank you for reading and replying.
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Post by bloodredtears on Apr 17, 2004 15:29:53 GMT -5
wonderful piece you have here...i really enjoyed reading it, and i can associate well with it!
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Post by DeadlySilence on Apr 17, 2004 19:26:20 GMT -5
Thank you.
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Post by Mikepoet on Apr 26, 2004 16:36:55 GMT -5
This was well written and I can relate. I fall in love like snapping fingers and often get too deeply involved when it is not mutual.
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Post by DeadlySilence on Apr 26, 2004 16:40:22 GMT -5
Thank you.
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Eclipse
Apprentice
It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time.
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Post by Eclipse on Apr 26, 2004 17:58:46 GMT -5
hmm i liked this one too. the repitition of the like "I'm so sick" made me think of something i wrote a while ago....lovely write you have here. ^.^
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Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Apr 26, 2004 21:41:51 GMT -5
I like this a lot. You can really feel the emotions in this one... The sadness, the resignation, the acceptance, the wondering... Wonderful write!
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Post by DeadlySilence on Apr 26, 2004 23:13:02 GMT -5
Thank you, Elle.
Thank you, Alex'z Death Chic (depressed)!
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