Giving In

[SilverEyes]

I"m giving in to you
And going under
I'm crying
I'm dying
In the darkness of the night
I'm giving in
And giving up
I thought I was strong
I thought i was a fighter
And now the darkness
Is swallowing me up
What can I say?
I'm crying
I'm dying
I'm giving in

[Avatre]

I like this a lot, but I think the fear of "I thought I was strong etc" could be expanded on. ^_^ Very nice.

[bloodredtears]

i really enjoy this piece...it's short and to the point...i think at one point everyone believes they're strong enough to handle everything by themselves! great job!

[serenepoetress]

you have well described the struggle to final realization of eventual defeat...I feel the concise passages add to the piece nicely and it is very powerful...