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Jan 18, 2004 2:17:05 GMT -5
Post by SilverEyes on Jan 18, 2004 2:17:05 GMT -5
Eight Hundred and Fifty miles I have gained
Happiness I’ve had to feign
A new house to grow to love
I wish I could give it one good shove
I also have a brand new school
Life is just so f***ing cruel
I get to make another friend
Why can’t this nightmare end?
Another town to live my life
I must be depression’s wife
I must have drawn an ace
I just want to leave this place
It's two poems in one.
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Jan 18, 2004 14:33:57 GMT -5
Post by bloodredtears on Jan 18, 2004 14:33:57 GMT -5
well i like this, but i don't see how the two poems could work separately of each other...as a whole it's wonderful! good job!
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amberputis
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~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
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Jan 18, 2004 15:44:59 GMT -5
Post by amberputis on Jan 18, 2004 15:44:59 GMT -5
i also liked this especially the lines...
"I also have a brand new school
Life is just so f***ing cruel"
it's awesome, it's bluntly stated just as how a normal everyday kind of person would put it. great write
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Feb 2, 2004 22:43:37 GMT -5
Post by SilverEyes on Feb 2, 2004 22:43:37 GMT -5
Thanks for the reviews. Looking at it now it couldn't be two poems but it could be considered the product of multiple personalities. ;D And sometimes it's best to be blunt.  |
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Feb 2, 2004 22:45:33 GMT -5
Post by bloodredtears on Feb 2, 2004 22:45:33 GMT -5
definitely multiple personalities...i can see that! and being blunt is one way to get through all the bullsh*t in life
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Feb 4, 2004 12:17:21 GMT -5
Post by John Barnett on Feb 4, 2004 12:17:21 GMT -5
This is certainly a unique style, and an interesting poem, I liked this.
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