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Post by bloodredtears on Jan 8, 2004 9:02:27 GMT -5
A Soul Inhabited by Evil
12/31/03
Remembering things
I'd rather forget.
Past come to present
and my mind scatters again.
Falling into my memories
I once again feel loss of control.
The happiness I live off
is wearing away so fast.
I'm starting to forget
why I'm happy at all.
All the things I love
are fading behind
the evil thoughts
inhabiting my soul.
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Avatre
Novice
Just around for the words...^.^
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Post by Avatre on Jan 8, 2004 16:06:33 GMT -5
I do hope I'm doing this right...regardless, I like this a lot-the poem itself. The only complaint I have (sheepish smile) is the title...I don't really like it. Great poem though.
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Post by bloodredtears on Jan 8, 2004 17:18:05 GMT -5
i hate writing titles...it's my worst point...so if you have any suggestions feel free to share them
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Avatre
Novice
Just around for the words...^.^
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Post by Avatre on Jan 9, 2004 16:07:51 GMT -5
I think "Demon" would be good, or something along those lines. Speaking of a random topic, it really annoys me when song titles are the most used line in the song. ^_^''
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Post by bloodredtears on Jan 9, 2004 16:15:48 GMT -5
that does get old fast!
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Post by SilverEyes on Jan 20, 2004 0:32:20 GMT -5
A tragic write but very good all the same and I like the title (just so you know).
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Wolf
Apprentice
In the end, we will remember not the words of our enemies, but the silence of our friends.
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Post by Wolf on Feb 21, 2004 1:49:37 GMT -5
Very intriguing and darkly fascinating - and well done... and yes, those things we would rather forget never really go away; but lurk, waiting beneath the surface, for the slightest hint of dark thoughts to surface and seize control...
All I can say is, same here...
Wolf
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sweetest17sin
Virtuoso
don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile!
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Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 22, 2004 21:38:21 GMT -5
awesome job on this one. i can relate so much to this one. i know im much happier than i was a year ago, and i know i'm happy, but sometimes i just have to wonder why? i wish i could pick out a favorite part of this poem, but i just can't. it was awesome. one of my favorites. nice job!
melissa!
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Post by richie on Feb 24, 2004 7:57:21 GMT -5
almost missed this it is one of the best from you and I meen that full of imagery, a sense of place -taking the reader into your poem's world, so sad and so beautifull I enjoyed reading it.
take care Richie.
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Post by JosephScottMorris on Mar 2, 2004 14:12:37 GMT -5
Deep and beautiful, overall excellent write! :)Joe
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Post by Mikepoet on Mar 21, 2004 19:16:18 GMT -5
I'm sorry for your pain..I have an idea for a title...Demon memory... :-XI got this from the first reply on this thread..They never go away..our memories..I wish they would..
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Post by bloodredtears on Mar 22, 2004 10:42:29 GMT -5
thanks for all the kind words everyone..i'm glad you enjoyed it...and thanks for the title suggestions...i think about it
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Seth
Virtuoso
Root Beer Float
Play something country!
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Post by Seth on Mar 22, 2004 16:14:51 GMT -5
I'm sory, I thought I had made a reply to this... ::sigh::
Well, this was truly a very emotional and strong piece, I enjoyed/loved this so very much. Wonderful write, very true...
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Post by X x K e l Z x X on Apr 1, 2004 20:11:29 GMT -5
This was fascinating, this gave me chills, great job Kris.
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