Alexxxxx
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"There is no fear in the house of flies" Brael.
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Post by Alexxxxx on Dec 6, 2003 12:09:00 GMT -5
Let me as i lie, Consumed by dreams Of harsh sunsets and Haunting nightmares.
This garden shines no longer, Its song of beauty and youth. So watch, ever silent, uncaring, As the rains of winter wear away this place.
The sweet canvas of bitterness, Yes that is where me must live, Surounded by an ecstacy of black, With which to nourish a mind beyond life.
So let us learn the ways, Of the flowers frozen in the paintings, Every shining, ever blooming, ever young,
Ever ready to ignore the tears of the dying.
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Skye
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MeRrY cHrIsTmAs!!!
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Post by Skye on Dec 7, 2003 12:56:28 GMT -5
Great write, I love this, love the ending!~Skye
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Post by bloodredtears on Dec 11, 2003 11:10:10 GMT -5
i really enjoyed this piece...i love the description in the end... those are my favorite lines....great job!
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Post by Persephone on Dec 12, 2003 3:15:05 GMT -5
Definitely has depth. I like the detachment concept of it.
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Alexxxxx
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"There is no fear in the house of flies" Brael.
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Post by Alexxxxx on Dec 12, 2003 8:48:29 GMT -5
Thanx all you folks for posting your views... im sorry i havent been able to reply earlier... but im really busy with my finals..
hopefulyl soon ill be posting again...
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Post by SilverEyes on Jan 20, 2004 23:41:38 GMT -5
This poem has a great depth to it and an interesting message. Very nice.
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