Treachery defined

[butterfly]

Treachery defined
Is lies
So sublime
So attractive with deceit
So easy to say
Through clenched teeth
And the emotions are dried to dust
So is the lust
In the revolving door of my mind
And coming to a conclusion
On the theory of war
Is too hard to ignore
And my moments of victory
Is to see your soul die.
butterfly

[NeverMore]

Ah yes... I felt this as I read it... yeah! Myself I would remove the s in moments... but the work says a great great deal to me.. nice write!

[alostandbrokensoul]

this was really good, though i do think removing the s would help the poem, its fine just the way it is!