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Post by cherry on Aug 28, 2004 10:20:28 GMT -5
Now a messed up freack in everys one mind who draws dragons and acts so gothic you will never understand even if you cut yourself 50 times. Is it my fult I'm stuck in my fanticy world after you chached me there. You chached my away from sanity and reality makeing me lost in my mine it took a lot of people to convince me I wasn't crazy. I thought I needed to be like you, you said you where all a good person should be but God save me if I'm ever like you.
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Post by bloodredtears on Aug 28, 2004 23:47:08 GMT -5
interesting...grammar isn't too good...do you mean caught??? i really like the last line though...it'd be really great if the grammar was a bit better...although i'm really picky about grammar, so it coue just be me..  |
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Post by ::..::FoX::..:: on Sept 6, 2004 15:01:43 GMT -5
Power-packed write, excellent.
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Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on Sept 15, 2004 1:12:59 GMT -5
i agree with both fox and bloodred. the grammar and spelling can be touched up, but overall, there's a raw passion in this piece, i liked.  .rk |
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