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Mad
Apr 7, 2004 18:05:40 GMT -5
Post by ::..::FoX::..:: on Apr 7, 2004 18:05:40 GMT -5
Why do I let you piss me off so bad
Why do I let you get me so sad
I just need to forget that you exist
Just cut off my lips that you once kissed
My blood spews from my mouth like rain
I am left with nothing but pain
I just wish you could only see
What exactly you have done to me
No way will I ever give you the time of day
'Cause that ____ you pulled was so lame
Now you wanna crawl back on your knees
I'd like to cut you down to the tee
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Mad
Apr 7, 2004 22:44:05 GMT -5
Post by bloodredtears on Apr 7, 2004 22:44:05 GMT -5
oooh...i can feel the anger radiating from this piece...remind me not to make you mad....great job fox!
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Mad
Apr 8, 2004 22:13:21 GMT -5
Post by Tania on Apr 8, 2004 22:13:21 GMT -5
I like this poem as it describes a heart betrayed and the anger and the bitterness that comes with. I like the honesty of emotion displayed in this poem.
I really like it.
Tania
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Mad
Apr 10, 2004 16:00:23 GMT -5
Post by ::..::FoX::..:: on Apr 10, 2004 16:00:23 GMT -5
Thanx guys
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Mad
Apr 12, 2004 14:42:29 GMT -5
Post by John Barnett on Apr 12, 2004 14:42:29 GMT -5
Fox, I can sense the anger in this piece, love can be frustrating my friend, you just gotta hang in there
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Mad
Apr 12, 2004 15:42:08 GMT -5
Post by ::..::FoX::..:: on Apr 12, 2004 15:42:08 GMT -5
Thanx
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Mad
Apr 14, 2004 17:39:46 GMT -5
Post by Fisherman on Apr 14, 2004 17:39:46 GMT -5
Fox, this was great dude, I know what you're feeling in this poem all too well.
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Mad
Apr 15, 2004 14:41:21 GMT -5
Post by ::..::FoX::..:: on Apr 15, 2004 14:41:21 GMT -5
Thanks Kevin
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Mad
Apr 16, 2004 3:27:38 GMT -5
Post by hantigger on Apr 16, 2004 3:27:38 GMT -5
You can really feel the pain in this poem, i especially like the cutting off the lips part!
Only one thing- would this work better in free verse? But mayb thats just me!
Hannah.
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Mad
May 3, 2004 21:05:27 GMT -5
Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on May 3, 2004 21:05:27 GMT -5
fox,
that's some pretty heavy and brutally honest stuff you've said...great job!
x rinna x
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