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Post by bloodredtears on Jan 29, 2004 1:09:36 GMT -5
Death Wishes
12:09 am
I hope you die!
yes I know those are strong words
well I don't f**king care.
If you don't like them,
get the hell out of my face.
I wish you would just die!
Maybe my anger is misplaced,
maybe my thoughts are beyond reckoning
maybe something has finally snapped in me
but i just want you to die
and leave me to my
...miseries
Get the hell out of my face
stop preaching to me
about something you don't understand
...who I really am
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Chaotic_Thetis
Apprentice
Bleed me! For i have witnessed yet remained silent.Slay me! For i had your love and kept it.
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Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Jan 29, 2004 16:40:45 GMT -5
Indeed, not only is it full of anger but it also feels quite threatening, woe betide those who cross your path on a bad day  Nicely written ^_^ |
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Post by bloodredtears on Jan 29, 2004 17:40:24 GMT -5
thanks...and yes, when i have a bad day the best thing for people to do is just avoid me...thanks for replying!
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Post by SilverEyes on Feb 3, 2004 18:31:45 GMT -5
Quite an emotional piece and I've been feeling that way for a few days now. In other news, I love the third line. ;D
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Post by kronicdaze on Feb 24, 2004 5:08:41 GMT -5
I know I'm kinda late but I did jus join the site...anyway...I thought the subject and meaning of the poem was good...but I find the rhyming confusing...some of it rhymes and some of it doesn't...but anyway...I like it how it is...good sh*t...lata
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 24, 2004 14:32:19 GMT -5
thanks everyone...the rhyming isn't meant to be confusing because i didn't purposely put any rhyming into it, it just kinda fell how it fell...thanks again for the replies!
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Post by kemleth on Feb 24, 2004 21:56:40 GMT -5
Good free form!
it realy started coming together about half way through... But you got alot of the feeling across through the first lines, pretty good!
I MEANT "IT"
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Celestial
Novice
Celestial.Photographer.Poet.
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Post by Celestial on Feb 29, 2004 13:43:11 GMT -5
I can really relate to this with my relationship with my mother. Sometimes I just want her to leave me alone so much and others I wish she'd see me for who I am, not who she thinks I am. Thankfully, I don't live with her so I don't have to go through that everyday.  Excellent job |
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 29, 2004 13:49:51 GMT -5
this wasn't written with my mother in mind...but it sure applies to her too! thanks everyone who replied!
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Seth
Virtuoso
Root Beer Float
Play something country!
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Post by Seth on Mar 24, 2004 12:52:01 GMT -5
Oh, I have been nin the situation too many times... Fantastic piece, bloodredtears, this one really hit close to home with me...
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Post by Mikepoet on Mar 26, 2004 0:13:56 GMT -5
If your ever around and feel this way, could you give me a hand signal or something? ;DI'llgo away :(this was all in fun you know. ;D
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Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on May 6, 2004 18:29:33 GMT -5
ooh i feel you on this one! great work!
x rinna x
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Nicely written ^_^
