Britni
Novice
And when the drops of dew moisten your skin, Do you think of me at all?
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Post by Britni on Jun 11, 2004 23:33:00 GMT -5
Don't you think if I loved you, I would tell you so, Don't you think if I needed you, I wouldn't let you go,
That's what I've tried to tell myself, Every night since you left for good, I just can't seem to comprehend, What I guess I really should,
You're gone and nothing can change that, God has taken you away, But your face remains in my mind, Every night and every day,
Don't you think if I loved you, I would tell you so, Don't you think if I needed you, I wouldn't let you go,
That's the mantra of my new self, To repeate in attempt to stay sane, When I'm feeling particularly lonely, I say this instead of your name,
You left without saying goodbye, No kiss, no hug, no smile, But your laughter floods my mind, Making our love worth while,
The truth is I do love you, And now I'm telling you so, The truth is I do need you, And I'll never let you go.
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Eclipse
Apprentice
It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time.
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Post by Eclipse on Jun 12, 2004 12:10:26 GMT -5
wow...this is really sad. is the person you're talking about in the poem died or just left? just wondering. it's a wonderful write. you make it flow very nicely and i liked the use of repetition. it helped add to the effect of the poem.
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Britni
Novice
And when the drops of dew moisten your skin, Do you think of me at all?
Posts: 17
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Post by Britni on Jun 25, 2004 18:10:16 GMT -5
yeah origionally it was meant as a death poem, but now that i look at it. i guess it doesn't have to be. thanks btw. i'm glad you liked it. ;D
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Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on Jun 26, 2004 5:55:27 GMT -5
britni, this is terribly sad. enjoyed, i like the rhyme in it. x r x
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