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Post by alostandbrokensoul on May 24, 2004 21:14:43 GMT -5
the sweetest sin of the taste of blood as we kiss our burning wrists as our eyes begin to flood the sweetest sin the burning cries the burning wounds the lists of lies . the sweetest sin no one knows about the pain thats the way it goes. the sweetest sin the burn of the salt rubbed into the wounds that are all our fault the sweetest sin the numbing pain the final blow that ends the game the sweetest sin of our death we finally win our long awaited rest. I just wrote this so tell me what u think and if it needs something K thanx
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Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on May 25, 2004 22:31:58 GMT -5
i've read this thrice now and i think the length, content, flow, repetition and imagery is perfect. no adjustments for me thanks, i really enjoyed it! x rinna x
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Seth
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Post by Seth on Jun 26, 2004 23:47:42 GMT -5
Hm, you have a way with words, truly a beautiful (in its own way) write. I loved it very much.
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