With A Kiss, Goodbye

[X x K e l Z x X]

I thought you were my friend
That you'd be there 'til the end
But then you dumped me so cold
You screamed so bold
Get away from me, I'm not like you
You broke me and left me blue
I had no idea what to do
But I sat alone and thought of you
The way I kissed your lips once
You were so shocked when it was done
You weren't sure what to think
So I offered you a drink
And we were quiet for a while
Then you looked at me and smiled
You hugged my neck and then you left
Now I put my heart back on the shelf
Since you turned me away
I hurt each new day
Just a lost and lonely girl
Trying to survive in this cruel world

[bloodredtears]

this piece was pretty good...was it hard getting it all to rhyme because a few of the lines seemed forced...but just a few...i like the passion behind this...great job

[amberputis]

yeah a little confusing, but i get your point...overall pretty good

[John Barnett]

Personally, I found this piece to be flawless, amazing job Kelly, so passionate.

[X x K e l Z x X]

Thank you all, I am glad you liked it John, it took a lot of passion to write it, so I guess it worked out well.

[T.J. Barber]

Great Job! this piece really spoke to me. I enjoyed every line. One better then the other. Great job!..Tj

[::..::FoX::..::]

Ouch, great write Kelly.

[Mikepoet]

At least some good poery came out of it.