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Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Mar 18, 2004 8:34:45 GMT -5
note: hmm... this is about death... which surprisingly isnt sadistic in nature or terrifying to some extent... just melancholic i guess. I was listening to evanescence!!! my immortal rocks. lol A bouquet of lilacs in my hand 'they've always been your favorite' I smile... as I place them on top of your grave
I'm singing our song... our song that we used to sing together during the times we felt silly, times that we were down
I wish you were still here...
at nights, I dream of you and wish that everything in my dream would come true but it will never happen...
so I just wish that wherever you are, heaven or hell, my voice will reach your ears reach your heart, reach your soul
and for one moment, we'll be one again singing our song... together... in one moment I hope that never ends... but then again, that wish will never become reality... oh no. because you're gone... you're gone... because the only voice singing our song is my own...
'even if I know that I can never share a moment with you for just one last time, why do I still wish for my dreams to come true?'
... is it because I want it to come true even if I know it won't?
...because I love you so much I can't let go?
maybe... maybe... that's the reason why...
end.
if ever you've read some of my poetry before, you'd notice that ive changed my style... itsh because i want to experiment... to see what style fits best.
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Post by bloodredtears on Mar 18, 2004 23:01:08 GMT -5
wonderful piece...i really like this style alot great job...i love My Immortal and evanescence...Great job!
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Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Mar 23, 2004 1:56:42 GMT -5
this style is more on freeverse mostly... thanks brt!
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Chaotic_Thetis
Apprentice
Bleed me! For i have witnessed yet remained silent.Slay me! For i had your love and kept it.
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Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Mar 27, 2004 5:33:50 GMT -5
I loved this piece, definitely a little more freestyle but it works wonderfully, especially the aburpt "end". Wonderfully written ^_^
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Seth
Virtuoso
Root Beer Float
Play something country!
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Post by Seth on Apr 1, 2004 20:31:54 GMT -5
Ha, I'm listening to that song right now... Well, wonderful write, I loved every line- the ending was really cool too.
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Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on May 11, 2004 4:49:21 GMT -5
adc, i like this a lot, fantastic work! x rinna x
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