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Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Mar 4, 2004 4:55:14 GMT -5
hmm... I think this'll probably be removed again but I'm still gonna post it anyway.
Chains, entwined to trap my limbs begin to tremble
as the wind continues to taunt me to no end
head up high in the air, I await its final push
waiting for it to imprison me in its grave
a watery grave that'll strangle my sanity
deprive me of breaths, suffocate me until I'm no more
footsteps finally snap me out of my reverie
as I turn to face my captor, avoiding his eyes
his laughter cruel and mocking, fills the air
my tears defy my false courage as they spill down
causing my captor to erupt in laughter once more
as his hand finds its way to my back
threatening to push me, to deliver me to my death
as I struggle to keep my cool, to face the grave with honor
to deny him of his sadistic voracity to see me adduce for my life
only to be pushed, to be dragged deeper by the chains that hold me
as the water envelops me in its malignant embrace
slowly, it chokes me to my death, to my liquid grave
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Post by richie on Mar 4, 2004 5:05:54 GMT -5
I do think you have talent and I meen that, this is much better in that you show your poetic gift in the peice, keep writing. Richie.
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Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Mar 4, 2004 5:11:08 GMT -5
ooh! so you'll not remove it like last time? yay!!!
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Eclipse
Apprentice
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Post by Eclipse on Mar 4, 2004 15:29:21 GMT -5
wow! i absolutely loved the imagery in this. so cool. question: why was it removed before?
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Post by T.J. Barber on Mar 4, 2004 15:40:39 GMT -5
Who keeps removing posts without my or John's permission? I'm getting tired of this....I meant it..I want to know ASAP...
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Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Mar 5, 2004 6:14:31 GMT -5
umm. Richie was the one who informed me that my three of my poems here in this category were going to be removed but I dunno who removed my Masochistic Seduction on the sensuality board though...
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Post by John Barnett on Mar 5, 2004 13:00:32 GMT -5
Okay, there was absolutely nothing wrong with this poem, and I'm sure the others were fine as well. I apologize for any inconvenience that has been caused by the deletion of your work. PM me and I'll give you the password to our Uncensored board, that way if you want to post controversial work, those who are offended by it will not have to read it. Great job by the way, the imagery was very well done.
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Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on May 21, 2004 6:18:27 GMT -5
ADC, this is effing brilliant! sorry someone keeps wiping your stuff! x rinna x
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