Wolf
Apprentice
In the end, we will remember not the words of our enemies, but the silence of our friends.
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Post by Wolf on Feb 18, 2004 1:53:49 GMT -5
The Reaper
I walk a barren earth
severed from time and space
I walk a lifeless earth
dead memories I embrace
I walk a silenced earth
no heartbeats but my own
I walk a mourning earth
reaping sorrows that I've sown
I walk a yearning earth
longing for days long dead
I walk a speechless earth
and hear my doom unsaid
I'll walk the shattered earth
for millennia, and alone
For I've walked the ravaged earth
The futile death I've known
© T. GhostWolf Davidson, November 7th, 1967
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Post by serenepoetress on Feb 18, 2004 2:33:41 GMT -5
I like the multitude of ways you have described the earth and the soveriegnty of death upon it...EXCELLENT!
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 19, 2004 10:20:19 GMT -5
i love the rhyme scheme you have going here and i love the repetition, that is different, and yet somehow the same each time...wonderful!
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Post by SilverEyes on Feb 19, 2004 23:32:53 GMT -5
Another good use of "almost" repitition and the last line ands a nice twist.
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Post by serenepoetress on Feb 20, 2004 20:45:31 GMT -5
You were able to draw me in and capture my attentions here! The barren, starkness depicted was done extremely well. I could really relate to the desolation described. Wonderful work!
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Celestial
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Celestial.Photographer.Poet.
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Post by Celestial on Mar 1, 2004 11:50:04 GMT -5
I like your sense of death here. Very nice. I enjoyed it.
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Post by +Criminal Passion+ on Mar 3, 2004 0:04:20 GMT -5
Loved it,
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Post by Deleted on Mar 27, 2004 22:42:58 GMT -5
I loved the rhyming and the 'different' earths. Great job; keep it up.
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Post by X x K e l Z x X on Apr 1, 2004 20:20:30 GMT -5
I loved this Ghostwolf, it was spooky and dark, great write!
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Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on May 13, 2004 6:14:13 GMT -5
wow ghostwolf this was fantastic, the imagery, the tone, the pace...great!
x rinna x
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Post by alostandbrokensoul on May 23, 2004 15:52:37 GMT -5
I loved this poem and the way the words flowed so easily. i also think it was a great description of what this world is becoming.
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