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Post by serenepoetress on Feb 10, 2004 2:07:29 GMT -5
An abandoned patch of hallowed ground...
Rusted wrought iron circles around...
Overgrown briars, thistles and weeds...
Eternity waits where destiny leads...
Crumbling granite amid tattered stone...
Surrounded by many, yet quite alone...
Willows weep o'er forgotten interred...
Earthworms covet, but never disturb...
Nocturnal winds sway grassy mounds...
Quelling the meadow, death resounds...
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 10, 2004 13:36:15 GMT -5
wow...that was an amazing work! great job! i loved it...this line was my fav i totally know how that is! great job again!
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Post by SilverEyes on Feb 10, 2004 19:13:24 GMT -5
This poem reminds me very much of my own life, especially the second to last line. Wonderful write.
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Post by Eclipse on Feb 10, 2004 20:07:10 GMT -5
^.^ your lines flow beautifully off the tongue. I like the imagery in this and how it touches the senses. nice work.
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Post by T.J. Barber on Feb 11, 2004 17:47:29 GMT -5
This was one of the better poems written on this site. I loved it. Your personality abounded this poem. You personal ora surrounded this poem in a truly magnificent way. I appreciate you sharing this with us all. It has spoke to me deeply. Great Job!!
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Post by Deleted on Feb 12, 2004 15:38:48 GMT -5
Wow. just simply put, wow. It flows well, has a good rhyming. Loved it. The ending was fitting, too. Great job.
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Post by richie on Feb 28, 2004 4:58:45 GMT -5
I think this is excellent, lovely metrecal rhyme, well done
take care Richie.
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