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Post by Mikepoet on Mar 24, 2004 20:01:48 GMT -5
Forget love
Forget a myth
Life shifts shape
deal with this.
Forget a female
to bear my young.
When love is stale
when she is young.
Try did I
to ease her pain.
“Lies” it cried
my soul it drained.
Perhaps it hurts
and traps my fein.
To fall in love
with one disdained.
Her pain is more
than I can bear
When I just want to
brush her hair.
A savior died
with a battle cry.
It hurts too much
to even try.
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Post by bloodredtears on Mar 25, 2004 4:18:44 GMT -5
very interesting piece...i really enjoyed it....i really liked the opening stanza! great job!
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Post by Mikepoet on Mar 25, 2004 11:44:30 GMT -5
This was to a female I had met who is in so much pain..It is insane to try to be freinds with her..I hope she does well in life but I cannot handle the walk away and leave me for days without hearing from her...I need love all the time...pouts and sniffs..thank you for reading...  |
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Chaotic_Thetis
Apprentice
Bleed me! For i have witnessed yet remained silent.Slay me! For i had your love and kept it.
Posts: 142
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Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Mar 27, 2004 4:46:50 GMT -5
Touching, short, simplistic yet it conveys so much, nicely done ^_^
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Post by Mikepoet on Mar 27, 2004 8:50:26 GMT -5
Thank you.. ;D
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Post by Dreamcatcher on Mar 27, 2004 23:13:15 GMT -5
The pain of love unrequited. Very well written piece--much enjoyed.....Meg
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Post by Mikepoet on Mar 28, 2004 10:24:53 GMT -5
This is nice to wake up to.. Thank you.. ;D
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amberputis
Virtuoso
~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
Posts: 330
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Post by amberputis on Mar 28, 2004 23:42:04 GMT -5
great job...sorry to hear about this female friend of yours, its rather unfortunate and sad, but hey things happen, i would know. But, well written...another great poem from you...i love your pieces!
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Post by Mikepoet on Mar 29, 2004 8:55:29 GMT -5
Thank you..She is one of the best writers I've ever read..  ..Sananomous with a writer is a note book full of pain.. |
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