Repost, revised religious poem

[Broken hope]

This place greys out and fades away
innocent eyes say exactly what they need to say

Pictures burn and turn to ash
Stuck in a whirlwind that happened so fast

False ideas in a dramatized dream
Stuck in a world where nothing is what it seems

Where God likes to abandoned his children
A world where we pay for our fathers sins

Turning love into hate
For an Idealistic sadistic fate

Where man becomes Beast
To sit at Christs last feast

To destroy the world for the better good
Deep inside we all know we should

Father Father save me from this hell
Mother Mother God has fell

Help reclaim the world for you
False deity and we may be through

Cure for nothing, tool for pain
The question at hand is "what is your name"

[Wickedblades666]

great write there...well said, i agree alot with the views in this poem...bravo

[rinna(on leave...for eternity)]

it's great to see you coming back to this.

maybe some punctuation would help the flow a tad?

[Broken hope]

probabaly but i am a very lazy man... you know us men.. lazy bums

[rinna(on leave...for eternity)]

i married one, so i am in no state to comment on that....lol. fair enough, it's your poem. you did a great job with the initial and revision.