Pathetic

Alex'z Death Chic
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|| Looks can be deceiving ||

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Pathetic Mar 17, 2004 5:34:24 GMT -5

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Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Mar 17, 2004 5:34:24 GMT -5

My tears are cascading down my cheeks
crimson with sorrow, hollowed by grief
I'm drowning in my pool of red liquid
trying to swim to the surface that just seems to evanesce
I can't breathe anymore...

Taste my tears, lick my wounds
Extol the pains that you've inflicted
coz I can no longer stand this madness
without chasing my sanity away
Save me from myself...

Envelop me once more in an everlasting embrace
Before this depression kills my soul
I'm only complete when you're with me
take me back, place me in your heart again
Kiss me before I die

Coz without you, I'll drown...
in my pool of red liquid
crimson with sorrow
hollowed by grief... I'll drown...
coz without you, nothing is worth living for anymore...

AHHH!!! I just had to write a poem like that. I dunno.... I was feeling all sentimental and all... LOL. Naw, just bored.

Last Edit: Mar 17, 2004 5:45:20 GMT -5 by Alex'z Death Chic

I'm a bad girl only when bad boys want me bad

Chaotic_Thetis Apprentice Bleed me! For i have witnessed yet remained silent.Slay me! For i had your love and kept it. Posts: 142	Pathetic Mar 17, 2004 17:55:26 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Mar 17, 2004 17:55:26 GMT -5 Interesting, it's nice the way you've contrasted slang terms such as "coz" with words such as "Extol" and "Evanesce" Nicely done.
	Last Edit: Mar 17, 2004 17:56:30 GMT -5 by Chaotic_Thetis A woman who choses the writing profession often does so as to give herself a rank within a male-dominated society

Alex'z Death Chic Apprentice \|\| Looks can be deceiving \|\| Posts: 241	Pathetic Mar 18, 2004 8:14:36 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Mar 18, 2004 8:14:36 GMT -5 oooh... i never looked at it that way... thanks
	I'm a bad girl only when bad boys want me bad

bloodredtears Legend I don't entirely think I've had enough rum to allow that kind of talk. Posts: 1,164	Pathetic Mar 18, 2004 22:45:16 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by bloodredtears on Mar 18, 2004 22:45:16 GMT -5 i really enjoyed this piece...i like the slang in there too...great job!
	Poetry copyright of Bloodredtears Summer has flown its nest, as the days swiftly turn to fall and we start to roost in the bosom of winter.

Alex'z Death Chic Apprentice \|\| Looks can be deceiving \|\| Posts: 241	Pathetic Mar 20, 2004 20:30:32 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Mar 20, 2004 20:30:32 GMT -5 thanks ;D
	I'm a bad girl only when bad boys want me bad

Hunter Virtuoso Fallen Angel Posts: 287	Pathetic Apr 2, 2004 5:00:09 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Hunter on Apr 2, 2004 5:00:09 GMT -5 Good.
	Beneath this mask of sparkling words, I am nothing. So forgive me for raising your hopes.

Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Mar 17, 2004 5:34:24 GMT -5

Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Mar 17, 2004 17:55:26 GMT -5

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Post by Hunter on Apr 2, 2004 5:00:09 GMT -5