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Post by Mikepoet on Mar 16, 2004 22:58:52 GMT -5
I’m asking you lady,
Why did you break up with me?
I remember the song,
Together forever. I believed
That you believed in me.
You just led me along,
Like a puppy dog on a leash.
And filled my mind,
Full of lies that we would last through eternity.
So now my heart is broken.
A poetic kiss, of empty loves tokens.
I do not want what we used to be,
Your caress of lies striped me emotionally.
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Post by bloodredtears on Mar 18, 2004 22:39:20 GMT -5
wonderful piece...i want to welcome you again to poet club...i hope to read a lot more of your stuff...i really liked how you ended this one..its great!
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Post by Mikepoet on Mar 19, 2004 8:55:20 GMT -5
Thanks I'm sometimes a posting fool..
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amberputis
Virtuoso
~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
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Post by amberputis on Mar 19, 2004 21:17:11 GMT -5
breakups can be so tough, i see no better way to express yourself...again fantastic poem!
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Post by Mikepoet on Mar 21, 2004 18:24:19 GMT -5
Thank you...Poetry is a sort of lifestyle..I honestly believe a poet has the ability to feel things deeper than one who does not read or wite poetyr..Of course thats up for debate..
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Hunter
Virtuoso
Fallen Angel
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Post by Hunter on Apr 2, 2004 5:01:27 GMT -5
Mike,
I like this.
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Post by Mikepoet on Apr 2, 2004 5:48:33 GMT -5
I was just like a little love sick puppy dog. ::)Thank you Hawkette. Your one of my favorite buds at AC. ;D
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Eclipse
Apprentice
It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time.
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Post by Eclipse on Apr 2, 2004 17:16:01 GMT -5
i liked the last line and how you ended it. lovely write.
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Post by Mikepoet on Apr 3, 2004 13:40:37 GMT -5
Thank you but last line is often sad but true. It hurts to love and believe in a dream and go day by day seeing it in your mind only to find it was lies.  |
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