Clutch / Blow

Sathien
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Clutch / Blow Mar 15, 2004 17:05:53 GMT -5

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Post by Sathien on Mar 15, 2004 17:05:53 GMT -5

Clutch

    Grabbed a pen
Scribbled me
Spilled the ink
Tainted you
Torn the paper
    Shattered us
Burned the pieces
ashes left
    of you
and me
    us

Blow

Blow me a kiss
      Induce me
Blow me a smile
      Blind me
Blow me a breath
      Suffocate me
Blow me your words
Sweet Lies
    Honey-coated dagger
      Kill me
    Save me
Just Blow

bloodredtears Legend I don't entirely think I've had enough rum to allow that kind of talk. Posts: 1,164	Clutch / Blow Mar 15, 2004 22:38:33 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by bloodredtears on Mar 15, 2004 22:38:33 GMT -5 two very good short pieces...good subject matter and good rhythm....
	Poetry copyright of Bloodredtears Summer has flown its nest, as the days swiftly turn to fall and we start to roost in the bosom of winter.

::..::FoX::..:: Poet Laureate Do you like my acid roc? Posts: 741	Clutch / Blow Mar 16, 2004 14:08:14 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ::..::FoX::..:: on Mar 16, 2004 14:08:14 GMT -5 I liked these, very interesting format.
	Scott F. Chandler Record Producer @ Acid Roc Records Recording Artist @ Acid Roc Records Perhaps next I'll be a Grammy winner!

Chaotic_Thetis Apprentice Bleed me! For i have witnessed yet remained silent.Slay me! For i had your love and kept it. Posts: 142	Clutch / Blow Mar 16, 2004 15:16:19 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Mar 16, 2004 15:16:19 GMT -5 Indeed, the arrangement was interesting, the idea of "scattered" as well as scattering the words of your poem, quite effective.
	A woman who choses the writing profession often does so as to give herself a rank within a male-dominated society

Eclipse Apprentice It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time. Posts: 222	Clutch / Blow Mar 16, 2004 15:34:10 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Eclipse on Mar 16, 2004 15:34:10 GMT -5 W ;DW! I loved the first one. that was just the coolest thing to me the way you seperated your lines.
	You saw what you get If you take what you take. Look in the eyes of the test. It's all because... Now there's a feeling I get. When I look to the left. But we can never be sensed. Our searching for a sign.

Sathien Guest	Clutch / Blow Mar 17, 2004 3:55:53 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Back to Top Post by Sathien on Mar 17, 2004 3:55:53 GMT -5 thanks minna. ;D

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Post by bloodredtears on Mar 15, 2004 22:38:33 GMT -5

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