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Secret
Apr 13, 2004 16:51:14 GMT -5
Post by angel on Apr 13, 2004 16:51:14 GMT -5
I go day by day Looking into those eyes Just wanting to say, Say something kept inside of me, For a long, long time. But before the words come out, My body freezes, My hands go numb, And my mouth goes dry. I just stand there, With nothing to say, Knowing that if I get it out, The sadness would go away. But it doesn't happen, So it remains The secret no one knows about.
8-13-03
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Apr 13, 2004 17:52:16 GMT -5
Post by T.J. Barber on Apr 13, 2004 17:52:16 GMT -5
Very good job angel. I enjoyed this piece. It really described the emotions one would encounter in such a situation as you have set up. Nice imagery and explanation. Keep it up, TJ
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Apr 13, 2004 17:53:05 GMT -5
Post by John Barnett on Apr 13, 2004 17:53:05 GMT -5
Angel, this is very good, well done.
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Apr 13, 2004 23:06:27 GMT -5
Post by bloodredtears on Apr 13, 2004 23:06:27 GMT -5
wonderful piece....i can't count the number of times i've kept quiet when i should have said something...this is wonderfully written! great job!
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Apr 14, 2004 11:37:54 GMT -5
Post by X x K e l Z x X on Apr 14, 2004 11:37:54 GMT -5
This is very good, I agree with you Kris, great work angel!
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Apr 14, 2004 20:25:02 GMT -5
Post by angel on Apr 14, 2004 20:25:02 GMT -5
aaaah, thank you everyone! I totally forgot that I even posted this poem on here. Thanx for the feedback!
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