imaginary goddess #5
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shape me into something I never will be, and you'll find out this facade was an escape from reality.
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Post by imaginary goddess #5 on Feb 17, 2004 17:19:47 GMT -5
Old Lady Eyes On her head lay a beige Wide rimmed hat, dotted with Cherry colored flora Locks of honey ringlets Spilled out from underneath Dimples creased her rosy cheeks Baby blue eyes peeked, animated Bright, from underneath shy lashes But today, the sun didn’t grace Her with exquisite light Her head ducked, eyebrows Furrowing, as if in thought She sat on the creaking, wooden pew Dispirited, her head bowed Her small hands clasped, reverent Murmurs escaped her lips Getting louder with each word Raising her hand, she viciously Took off her hat, tossing it across the church And when her eyes were unshielded, Her baby blue eyes glimmered from Innocence to weary to old And old lady’s eyes Frail from seeing too much Clear with wisdom, shadowed with pain - by Lianna 02/07/04? Love this Smiley! muah.
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Post by John Barnett on Feb 17, 2004 17:23:30 GMT -5
This was a very well written piece, great job! WELCOME TO POET CLUB! We are glad to have you with us. Please keep the awesome work coming.
John
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 17, 2004 17:25:16 GMT -5
i really enjoyed this piece...the two different descriptions are wonderful! great job! and a big welcome to poet club!
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Post by John Barnett on Feb 17, 2004 17:25:55 GMT -5
This was a very well written piece, great job! WELCOME TO POET CLUB! We are glad to have you with us. Please keep the awesome work coming.
John
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imaginary goddess #5
Novice
shape me into something I never will be, and you'll find out this facade was an escape from reality.
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Post by imaginary goddess #5 on Feb 17, 2004 17:26:18 GMT -5
thanks. - Lianna
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Post by SilverEyes on Feb 17, 2004 18:03:27 GMT -5
Very nice, I especially love the final stanza. Welcome to Poet Club.
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amberputis
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~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
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Post by amberputis on Feb 17, 2004 21:40:22 GMT -5
this was all in all very well written, numerous descriptions, which is fantastic, yes welcome!
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