amberputis
Virtuoso
~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
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Post by amberputis on Feb 23, 2004 19:27:12 GMT -5
wow you have such deep poems indeed! This is a little disappointing, not becuz of your writing but because this is very sad, and true for lots of people. great point
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 24, 2004 0:59:49 GMT -5
another great piece that states societal issues...the ending of this is truly sad..great job!
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Post by kronicdaze on Feb 24, 2004 3:12:43 GMT -5
thanx fa all the comments...this is the first I've heard of what people think of this poem...I'm glad it's gettin good responces..thanx again...lata
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Post by JosephScottMorris on Feb 24, 2004 3:26:56 GMT -5
This is a heart felt poem, if you critique this poem it will be an excellent write.I think you are a good writer, there are some slang and typos in error, overall a great poem.Thanks for sharing it! ;DJoe
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Post by kronicdaze on Feb 24, 2004 4:21:26 GMT -5
This is a heart felt poem, if you critique this poem it will be an excellent write.I think you are a good writer, there are some slang and typos in error, overall a great poem.Thanks for sharing it! ;DJoe Thanx fa commentin joe...but the slang is not error...I think for the subject of the poem the language that is used fits it very well...I write how I talk...but thanx anywa...lata |
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