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Post by insanepoets on Mar 4, 2004 14:55:00 GMT -5
Two nights, two days,
who cares
when worry stays
fresh in the mind;
who knows
how to unbind
the chains so tight;
why must
I insist to fight
external waves
of those
crossing my stage
lending thier grief
to me
quick as a theif
make it my own
to dwell
upon for time unkown.
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Eclipse
Apprentice
It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time.
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Post by Eclipse on Mar 4, 2004 15:26:36 GMT -5
interesting flow. i liked the short lines. it made for an easy read.
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Post by Dreamcatcher on Mar 11, 2004 12:40:59 GMT -5
Your flow of words was very nicely done. Theme and scheme was wonderful...........Dreamcatcher
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Post by bloodredtears on Mar 14, 2004 20:48:06 GMT -5
wonderful piece: i love that part especially...wonderfully done
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Chaotic_Thetis
Apprentice
Bleed me! For i have witnessed yet remained silent.Slay me! For i had your love and kept it.
Posts: 142
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Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Mar 16, 2004 15:11:02 GMT -5
I agree with BRT, that part i felt emobodied most of the poem, though it was short. Nicely done regardless ^_^
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Post by X x K e l Z x X on Apr 1, 2004 20:24:24 GMT -5
Nice flow, intriguing format, good job overall!
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