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Post by +Criminal Passion+ on Mar 2, 2004 15:56:55 GMT -5
Words, quietly pronounced, today they mean so much
Words like again, no more, alone, trespassing…
Words living in my chest, invisible, untouched
Today they mean a lot, tomorrow they are nothing.
Morphine for pain, absinthe for doubting minds
Come here, my friend, and whisper in my ear
Here, in the dark, our lies can live and hide
In words… heartbeating, love, immortal, fear…
They flow around - remainings of the past
Disturbing dreams that never came to life
And in their warmth I carelessly trust
Words… beauty, resurrection, brother, strife…
They are like men that come and go in time
Intrude and fade like sunsets, melt with sorrow
Yes, words… There is just life, there is no crime
In saying things that disappear by morrow.
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Post by bloodredtears on Mar 2, 2004 19:09:14 GMT -5
sweet poem you have here...i really like the idea behinds it...and words are only that now..just words...great job!
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Mikhael
Novice
...and love is not a victory march/it's a cold and it's a broken hallelujah...
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Post by Mikhael on Mar 2, 2004 21:56:38 GMT -5
this one is very pretty, and true, which is something in a forum of broken hearted melodramas. i really liked the last stanza. it was very accurate, especially the men part. not just men, friends do that too. some people just grab your attention that way and then they leave and it didn't matter after all. really good job with this. i'm impressed.
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sweetest17sin
Virtuoso
don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile!
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Post by sweetest17sin on Mar 2, 2004 22:12:39 GMT -5
i really liked this poem. it is true, very true. so many times people obsess about something said, and by the next day, maybe even next hour, it will have been forgotten. nice job though!
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Post by +Criminal Passion+ on Mar 2, 2004 23:30:18 GMT -5
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Post by JosephScottMorris on Mar 3, 2004 20:21:23 GMT -5
I enjoyed reading your poem, good message,Thanks for sharing it! ;DJoe
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amberputis
Virtuoso
~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
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Post by amberputis on Mar 7, 2004 12:15:33 GMT -5
this was very good, i enjoyed it very much!
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Post by Charli on Mar 10, 2004 18:43:00 GMT -5
Very nice-I loved it, even though I can't quite put my finger on why....
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Post by X x K e l Z x X on Apr 1, 2004 20:26:05 GMT -5
This was extraordinary, great write, well done.
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