Celestial
Novice
Celestial.Photographer.Poet.
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Post by Celestial on Feb 28, 2004 16:41:36 GMT -5
This is another poem that was inspired. The picture I found that inspired it was of two males, both going in opposite directions and one looked serious or mad and the other was looking hurt emotionally. Enjoy.
Forgive me
Please won't you do that?
I know I was wrong
I know you were right
We need one another
Won't you please
Just forgive me?
I can't stand the way
You look at me...
Full of anger
Full of regret
Tell me I'm still your friend
Tell me we can still talk
Tell me you care about me...
~ Forgiveness ~
By CAB 2004
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Post by JosephScottMorris on Feb 29, 2004 2:20:09 GMT -5
I like your poem, good format easy to read. ;DJoe
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Post by SilverEyes on Feb 29, 2004 3:16:12 GMT -5
This is a good description of any relationship. The third stanza has to be my favorite.
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 29, 2004 4:11:38 GMT -5
another really good poem...i really enjoyed this one too! great job!
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Chaotic_Thetis
Apprentice
Bleed me! For i have witnessed yet remained silent.Slay me! For i had your love and kept it.
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Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Feb 29, 2004 5:06:05 GMT -5
Hmm, it's very a much a "i've heard it before" type poem. Simplistic format, yes, but simplistic formats often compliment complex poetry or underlying meanings and so forth. This poem was very straightforward, when you could've added more description to really explore "forgiveness" and all it's connotations.
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Post by Burning Innocence on Mar 1, 2004 14:46:45 GMT -5
Well that's one way of dipicting the painting you saw. I remember I had to do a similar excercise in school. We had to write a poem of certain pictures our teacher put up. Everyone had different views, but none the less we had to express what we saw in words. Nicely done.
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sweetest17sin
Virtuoso
don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile!
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Post by sweetest17sin on Mar 2, 2004 22:17:30 GMT -5
nice job, once again!
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