Whispers

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Whispers Feb 28, 2004 16:34:01 GMT -5

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Post by Celestial on Feb 28, 2004 16:34:01 GMT -5

Just an inspired poem.

Whispers in the night
Tell me how you feel
Whispers in the day
Tell me who you are

But will they tell me
Who I am?
How I feel?

I wish I knew...
Then I could
Tell you how I feel

So sleep and dream
Dream about that day
The day I can finally utter
Those cherished words

Whispers in the night
Will tell you how I feel
Whispers in the day
Will tell me who you are

One day they will tell me
Who I am and what I feel
Until then...
Just dream about that moment...
That sweet moment...

~ Whispers ~
By CAB 2004

Yeah, it's a bomb.
Yes, it's lit.
Yes, you better run for your life.
:: insert evil laughter here ::

SilverEyes Poet Laureate Silver eyes crying crimson tears. Posts: 609	Whispers Feb 29, 2004 3:09:41 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by SilverEyes on Feb 29, 2004 3:09:41 GMT -5 I enjoyed this very much. I like how you twisted the first stanza in the fifth stanza and the overall flow. The ellipses are a nice touch.
	You know I'm dying to live Until I'm ready I'm ready to die ~Jonny Lang~

bloodredtears Legend I don't entirely think I've had enough rum to allow that kind of talk. Posts: 1,164	Whispers Feb 29, 2004 4:09:29 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by bloodredtears on Feb 29, 2004 4:09:29 GMT -5 wonderful piece you have here...i really enjoyed the repeating lines in here...great job and welcome to poet club
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Persephone Guest	Whispers Feb 29, 2004 6:59:39 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Back to Top Post by Persephone on Feb 29, 2004 6:59:39 GMT -5 Interesting concept.

Eclipse Apprentice It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time. Posts: 222	Whispers Feb 29, 2004 9:54:48 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Eclipse on Feb 29, 2004 9:54:48 GMT -5 interesting form of writing. very cool.
	You saw what you get If you take what you take. Look in the eyes of the test. It's all because... Now there's a feeling I get. When I look to the left. But we can never be sensed. Our searching for a sign.

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Whispers Mar 1, 2004 14:08:16 GMT -5

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Post by Burning Innocence on Mar 1, 2004 14:08:16 GMT -5

It's nicely done. It reminds of how most relationships are nowadays. People are afraid to admit who they really are. They are afraid to say how they feel because they fear they may insult someone in someway or hurt them. Everyone puts on their masks and play pretend.

Last Edit: Mar 5, 2004 4:44:14 GMT -5 by Burning Innocence

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sweetest17sin Virtuoso don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile! Posts: 252	Whispers Mar 2, 2004 22:19:10 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by sweetest17sin on Mar 2, 2004 22:19:10 GMT -5 oh, that was really beautiful. i loved it!
	somewhere there's someone who dreams of your smile and finds in your presence that life is worthwhile, so when you are lonely remember it's true; somebody, somewhere is thinking of you!

Post by Celestial on Feb 28, 2004 16:34:01 GMT -5

Post by SilverEyes on Feb 29, 2004 3:09:41 GMT -5

Post by bloodredtears on Feb 29, 2004 4:09:29 GMT -5

Post by Persephone on Feb 29, 2004 6:59:39 GMT -5

Post by Eclipse on Feb 29, 2004 9:54:48 GMT -5

Post by Burning Innocence on Mar 1, 2004 14:08:16 GMT -5

Post by sweetest17sin on Mar 2, 2004 22:19:10 GMT -5