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Post by John Barnett on Mar 9, 2004 16:19:37 GMT -5
Heavy oceans of worry cloud my mind
As I drift away to a different time
My heart is lost in oblivious thought
But I sit and pine until I am caught
Then I hide away the truth behind a shadow
And escape the real would out my window
Only to hit bottom on the outside of my room
Only to witness a sneak peak of what they call doom
Yet I seek redemption after my trangressions
And I seek relief to control my aggression
For I am a whack job waiting for a shrink
Sometimes, however, I just forget to think |
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Eclipse
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It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time.
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Post by Eclipse on Mar 9, 2004 18:53:31 GMT -5
for some reason this made me giggle a little at the end. I like the last two lines the most.
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amberputis
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~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
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Post by amberputis on Mar 9, 2004 19:29:34 GMT -5
oh how i know the feeling, good job here!
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Post by Charli on Mar 10, 2004 18:39:34 GMT -5
Nice, so easy to relate to!
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Post by Dreamcatcher on Mar 11, 2004 12:35:55 GMT -5
I loved this write. Well chosen words of where I have been at one time or another. Thank you for sharing this excellent poem...........................Dreamcatcher
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Post by John Barnett on Mar 11, 2004 14:11:27 GMT -5
Well it's so true to me, I am stressed beyond the point of sanity.
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sweetest17sin
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don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile!
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Post by sweetest17sin on Mar 11, 2004 22:35:20 GMT -5
nice job on this one. great poem because i think everyone often times feels extremely stressed. i know i do w/ scholarships and work and school and this and that. cant we all just take a break from life once and a while!
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Chaotic_Thetis
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Bleed me! For i have witnessed yet remained silent.Slay me! For i had your love and kept it.
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Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Mar 16, 2004 15:07:19 GMT -5
Yeah..we could, it's called Coma >_>
Heh, sorry, i liked this piece for the lack of punctuation, it goes with what you're saying in the poem, a constant run on which nearly takes the breath out of you till right at the end, when you pause for a simple "hope" as it were. Nice work ^_^
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Post by X x K e l Z x X on Apr 1, 2004 20:25:36 GMT -5
Wow, I felt this one for sure, I remain stressed 24/7, ya know. But great write here John, I like.
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NeverMore
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Beethoven Looking f*g
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Post by NeverMore on Apr 17, 2004 2:19:25 GMT -5
reading this and some of your other works I realise now why I get along with you *L* This is just one of those hitting the hammer with the nail poems... amazing what stress can do *S* I truely enjoyed reading your stress!
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Post by bloodredtears on Apr 17, 2004 15:17:07 GMT -5
wow, can i totally associate with this piece...stress is like my middle name...and, as always, it was wonderfuly written..great job!
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