amberputis
Virtuoso
~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
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Post by amberputis on Feb 23, 2004 19:11:20 GMT -5
interesting use of vocabulary, but good meaning behind all of it.
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 24, 2004 0:45:16 GMT -5
another good piece...and yes the language is interesting..i prefer good grammar in my poetry, but your form makes it flow really well...great job!
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Post by kronicdaze on Feb 24, 2004 3:15:16 GMT -5
interesting use of vocabulary, but good meaning behind all of it. I write how I would talk...but in my more serious poems I use proper english...but I like the slang becuz thats really how I talk |
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Post by SilverEyes on Feb 24, 2004 18:03:55 GMT -5
The slang makes it seem more like the real world. Nice write.
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Post by kronicdaze on Feb 24, 2004 18:05:57 GMT -5
Thanx fa commentin...I thought it did too...but it's all good...every site I post poetry on has a problem with my slang...but I like it...thanx again...lata
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