somaybeitsme
Novice
"I have my eyes and you have your eyes to see completely two different things"
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Post by somaybeitsme on Dec 7, 2003 23:53:41 GMT -5
What words turely mean when you feel it:
Only three hours Of sleep, Black circles Under burning Eyes Staring sweetly At the smell Of chocolate scented Candle wax, As my fingers play With its limber shape and form. Molding you Into a piece Of red. From amber glazed flames Dancing to the sound Of a random song Blasting through The speakers Of my heart As the static screeches to the surface Losing ground The distance running away From me. A black and white Photograph Of a sad face That catches on fire When you kiss it With bloody lipstick. Put a Band-Aid on it It will be all better As we rub off All the make-up, Shimmering eye shadow And wicked black mascara That perfectly conceals The irony truth Worn on words That we’re all afraid To wear Inside out And backwards.. .
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Post by Persephone on Dec 10, 2003 5:09:23 GMT -5
Very scrutinizing about the facades we keep and of life. Fits well. =) ~Penny
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Post by bloodredtears on Dec 11, 2003 11:25:59 GMT -5
i really liked this piece...i could relate to much of it...and i loved the way it flowed...great job!
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Post by T.J. Barber on Dec 24, 2003 16:28:08 GMT -5
I too could sense a feeling of relation to this poem. You are such a great artist and we are so glad to have you here at Poet Club Forever. God Bless and Happy Holidays, Tj
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Post by SilverEyes on Jan 14, 2004 18:59:04 GMT -5
Wow... just, wow.
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Eclipse
Apprentice
It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time.
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Post by Eclipse on Jan 29, 2004 13:35:34 GMT -5
i loved the flow in this!! it's like...hmm how to explain this...it's like a sentence but chopped up into such segments that made it sound a lot like a song. i hope that makes some sense! ;D you have quite a way with words. wonderful piece.
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Post by John Barnett on Feb 24, 2004 14:22:27 GMT -5
This was great. I love the imagery and the title. Also a very interesting format. Great job!
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