DarkVortex
Novice
Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." -Robert Frost
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Post by DarkVortex on May 22, 2005 18:46:37 GMT -5
A day of longing a person from last night's dream. Creates a space of passion trickling in a tear's stream. Voices of the night call to my wish of invigorating love. Sealing a letter of ardor's aroma tied to an ancient dove.
As I am bewitched by the scent, I vision a rare admirer. So phenomenal I feel hitched from thee heart to her. To animate a reverie as great as this, would sing aloud. Never ceasing the rush from her weightless cloud.
Her voice is a melody played from an angel's harp. The sound like a spear to a soul's eye tis so sharp. It's the moment she apears she recieves my ears. For the seconds of frozen time I extricate life's sears.
She understand's my life isn't a undiminished waste. The kiss of ingraved well being is what she can taste. Revealing a heart felt emotion lusted for a long while. With an undying lifetime of her incandescent smile.
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Seth
Virtuoso
Root Beer Float
Play something country!
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Post by Seth on Jul 11, 2005 0:47:37 GMT -5
"Her voice is a melody played from an angel's harp. The sound like a spear to a soul's eye tis so sharp."
Terrific lines. They really stuck out and stuck with me. This is magnificent and mind-blowing. The ending lines really complete the whole poem, and it all moves and paces so in tune- in harmony. There is nothing to dislike about any of this at all. Astonishing write.
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Post by T.J. Barber on Jul 11, 2005 14:12:14 GMT -5
I agree with Seth completely. Those two lines just made the entire poem. However, each and every line were wonderful messages that spoke to the soul. You are an incredible writer and an awesome Poet. Your writings just leap out and catch the reader. Wonderful job Vortex. I truly enjoyed it.
TJ
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DarkVortex
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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." -Robert Frost
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Post by DarkVortex on Jul 19, 2005 0:51:15 GMT -5
Thanx, I enjoy al your comments... my site is.. ...~Nick
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