imaginary goddess #5
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shape me into something I never will be, and you'll find out this facade was an escape from reality.
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Post by imaginary goddess #5 on Feb 17, 2004 20:13:49 GMT -5
Vivid Emptiness by Lianna
His hot breath washed over her. She’s just lying weakly in his arms, Softly letting the searing tears rain, Gently in her eyes of bittersweet pain.
Her heart, a deluge of heavy regret, pounding As acoustic anguish weaved a quilt of death. She let him use her simply as a toss. She, a maiden of infinite loss,
Is filled with sad departures of dying hope, Filled with fleeting, untrue images of love unknown, and Whispering ghosts of unwanted desire and denial, Filled with sardonic, curving lips in a fragment of a smile.
She had become blind, mute, deaf, Hazed and dazed, the hallucination of love. Eyes of smoldering flames turned ashen; Freezing, dying, the atrophying of passion.
She thinks, it’s her fault for the position she’s in Dispassionately, she leaves the bed, yet yearning him; Stripped free of virginal morals, disgustingly charmed, She resists the temptation to sink back into his arms.
Leaving him behind, never looking back. All that he could make of her presence is this: the faint scent Of her perfume and an imprint upon the pillow, ‘cause All he could see when the dawn came was
The vivid emptiness of unruly loneliness.
--------------------- updated: 02/17/2004 ;D written: ??/??/2003
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Chaotic_Thetis
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Bleed me! For i have witnessed yet remained silent.Slay me! For i had your love and kept it.
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Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Feb 17, 2004 20:59:32 GMT -5
WOW!!! Simply that! Wow!! Part of it reminded me of the book The Claiming Of Sleeping Beauty by Ann Rice, but the ending stanza was a completely different turn from the book itself. The imagery, the use of voacbularly, wonderful, truly wonderful ^_^
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Post by SilverEyes on Feb 17, 2004 21:14:25 GMT -5
Beautiful descriptions and tragic too. Nice write.
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imaginary goddess #5
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shape me into something I never will be, and you'll find out this facade was an escape from reality.
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Post by imaginary goddess #5 on Feb 17, 2004 21:15:05 GMT -5
hmm... must check into that book. (never heard of it.) thanks. glad you enjoyed it. - Lianna [ i m a g i n a r y g o d d e s s # 5 ]
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 17, 2004 21:50:44 GMT -5
very good piece...i really liked the imagery and the rhyme scheme used! great job!
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Eclipse
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Post by Eclipse on Feb 18, 2004 16:47:26 GMT -5
completely breathtaking...
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