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Hunter Virtuoso Fallen Angel Posts: 287	Drowned May 6, 2004 7:14:07 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Hunter on May 6, 2004 7:14:07 GMT -5 Drowned I drowned – in your eyes as sea salt spray caked your eyelashes and soft sand crumbled beneath our feet I drowned – in your eyes as ocean currents beat against my ankles my legs my hips my shoulders I drowned –
	Beneath this mask of sparkling words, I am nothing. So forgive me for raising your hopes.

John Barnett Founders Founder Posts: 994	Drowned May 6, 2004 18:45:45 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by John Barnett on May 6, 2004 18:45:45 GMT -5 Interesting format, nice job!
	Jwalaeb

bloodredtears Legend I don't entirely think I've had enough rum to allow that kind of talk. Posts: 1,164	Drowned May 14, 2004 15:43:41 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by bloodredtears on May 14, 2004 15:43:41 GMT -5 omg...i LOVED this piece... i don't know why exactly but it just really hit me...it was so beautiful....loving someone feels exactly like drowning....great job!
	Poetry copyright of Bloodredtears Summer has flown its nest, as the days swiftly turn to fall and we start to roost in the bosom of winter.

Hunter Virtuoso Fallen Angel Posts: 287	Drowned May 15, 2004 7:37:26 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Hunter on May 15, 2004 7:37:26 GMT -5 Thank you
	Beneath this mask of sparkling words, I am nothing. So forgive me for raising your hopes.

Eclipse Apprentice It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time. Posts: 222	Drowned May 16, 2004 18:07:02 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Eclipse on May 16, 2004 18:07:02 GMT -5 yeah i also liked the comparison between drowning and falling in love. your descriptions flow beautifully. lovely piece.
	You saw what you get If you take what you take. Look in the eyes of the test. It's all because... Now there's a feeling I get. When I look to the left. But we can never be sensed. Our searching for a sign.