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Apr 27, 2004 17:51:38 GMT -5
Post by gcsp789 on Apr 27, 2004 17:51:38 GMT -5
TEXT SCARED
IM SCARED TO BE LEFT ALONE
IM SCARED TO BE HERE WITH U
IM SCARED TO LEAVE U BEHIND
IM SCARED TO LOVE U
WHAT IF U LEAVE ME FOR SOMEONE ELSE
IM SCARED TO BE HERE LOVING U
AND MOST OF ALL IM SCARED FOR U TO LEAVE CUZ I LOVE AND IM SCARED
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Apr 28, 2004 23:14:57 GMT -5
Post by PoeticWarfare on Apr 28, 2004 23:14:57 GMT -5
I've never been too crazy about caps lock...however I can over look that..this is a fairly good poem, other than personally, I don't care for run on lines like we see in your closing, plus the repition of I'm Scared, grows a little tired....
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Apr 30, 2004 12:27:03 GMT -5
Post by Mikepoet on Apr 30, 2004 12:27:03 GMT -5
I liked it and saw the I'm scared part as the meat of the poem about a feeling and the poet expressed fear no matter which direction was taken. Of the said fears the worst fear was to leave and be withought the love.
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May 1, 2004 15:26:31 GMT -5
Post by amberputis on May 1, 2004 15:26:31 GMT -5
well, it was different, but everyone has their own style and i can say at least its understanding, all poetry is at times, is feelings put into words, so props my friend!
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