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amberputis
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~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~

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Post by amberputis on Feb 16, 2004 15:09:53 GMT -5

His sheets were my sanctuary
where true colors were revealed
movement in rhythm
our lips together sealed
this night unforgetable
rememberance ponders my mind
I try to force out of visual
but a new thought, I cannot find
Now I'm spinning on my own mattress
where the colors are black and white
my movements uncontrolable
my heart and mind fight
outside I am a survivor
outside I look strong
ahh, but who am I kidding
inside everything's wrong

Amber

bloodredtears Legend I don't entirely think I've had enough rum to allow that kind of talk. Posts: 1,164	Two-Faced Feb 16, 2004 15:14:08 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by bloodredtears on Feb 16, 2004 15:14:08 GMT -5 very interesting piece...i really liked the last two lines...i can connect with those! great job!
	Poetry copyright of Bloodredtears Summer has flown its nest, as the days swiftly turn to fall and we start to roost in the bosom of winter.

richie Virtuoso Posts: 302	Two-Faced Feb 16, 2004 15:20:40 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by richie on Feb 16, 2004 15:20:40 GMT -5 another good poem, excellent. richie.
	from childhood's hour I have not been as others were-I have not seen as others saw-I could not bring my passions from a common spring from the same sourse I have not taken my sorrow: I could not awaken my heart to joy at the same tone and all I loved I loved alone.

SilverEyes Poet Laureate Silver eyes crying crimson tears. Posts: 609	Two-Faced Feb 16, 2004 15:50:18 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by SilverEyes on Feb 16, 2004 15:50:18 GMT -5 Interesting piece and it has a great flow. The last two lines really bring it together.
	You know I'm dying to live Until I'm ready I'm ready to die ~Jonny Lang~

Eclipse Apprentice It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time. Posts: 222	Two-Faced Feb 16, 2004 20:01:45 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Eclipse on Feb 16, 2004 20:01:45 GMT -5 i liked the ending. your rhyme was nicely done.
	You saw what you get If you take what you take. Look in the eyes of the test. It's all because... Now there's a feeling I get. When I look to the left. But we can never be sensed. Our searching for a sign.

sweetest17sin Virtuoso don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile! Posts: 252	Two-Faced Feb 16, 2004 23:38:05 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 16, 2004 23:38:05 GMT -5 hey...nice job on this one.
	somewhere there's someone who dreams of your smile and finds in your presence that life is worthwhile, so when you are lonely remember it's true; somebody, somewhere is thinking of you!

Chaotic_Thetis Apprentice Bleed me! For i have witnessed yet remained silent.Slay me! For i had your love and kept it. Posts: 142	Two-Faced Feb 17, 2004 8:07:17 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Feb 17, 2004 8:07:17 GMT -5 Inetersting piece, very subtle and well written ^_^
	A woman who choses the writing profession often does so as to give herself a rank within a male-dominated society

imaginary goddess #5 Novice shape me into something I never will be, and you'll find out this facade was an escape from reality. Posts: 69	Two-Faced Feb 17, 2004 17:57:25 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by imaginary goddess #5 on Feb 17, 2004 17:57:25 GMT -5 Loved the association of colors (beds too) and emotions. the last line added a touch of humor - great job. lovely write - Lianna
	- Lianna Last one left of our lineage - don't forget us. imaginary goddesses. "shallowed up in the sound of my screaming cannot cease for the fear of silent nights oh how i long for the deep sleep dreaming the goddess of imaginary light..." - Evanescence

Post by amberputis on Feb 16, 2004 15:09:53 GMT -5

Post by bloodredtears on Feb 16, 2004 15:14:08 GMT -5

Post by richie on Feb 16, 2004 15:20:40 GMT -5

Post by SilverEyes on Feb 16, 2004 15:50:18 GMT -5

Post by Eclipse on Feb 16, 2004 20:01:45 GMT -5

Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 16, 2004 23:38:05 GMT -5

Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Feb 17, 2004 8:07:17 GMT -5

Post by imaginary goddess #5 on Feb 17, 2004 17:57:25 GMT -5