Hunter
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Post by Hunter on Apr 21, 2004 19:56:42 GMT -5
Enchantment
I danced across the stars
and watched you hang the moon
satin stardust coats our hair
and moonlight fills our eyes
we waltzed across the night
and watched the sun rise
sliding down on sunbeams
falling on velvet grass
watching clouds drift by above
waiting for Venus’s blessing
we rise again and dance
across the satin skies
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Post by bloodredtears on Apr 21, 2004 23:57:04 GMT -5
beautiful piece...i really enjoyed it...the imagery is great!  |
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Post by Hunter on Apr 22, 2004 0:14:11 GMT -5
Thank you.
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Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Apr 24, 2004 5:09:51 GMT -5
ahh... I LOVE THIS. kinda depressing in a sense though because it kinda reminds me of a fairytale... a mere fairytale that will never happen in real life... I guess that's why I love this...
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Post by Hunter on Apr 24, 2004 5:16:04 GMT -5
Thanks.
To tell you the truth, I don't think I was entirely "here" when I wrote it...
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Post by Eclipse on Apr 24, 2004 11:02:24 GMT -5
wow your description and imagery in this is awesome. you don't use the normal descriptions for things and it shocks the reader. i really liked it. nice write.
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Post by Hunter on Apr 24, 2004 19:08:24 GMT -5
 Thank you. |
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Post by Mikepoet on Apr 26, 2004 19:34:47 GMT -5
I like the dreamlike type poetry that this is to me. It was well written and seemed to show the dreamlike state of romance when it feels good.
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Post by Hunter on Apr 26, 2004 19:39:32 GMT -5
Thank you Mike |
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Thank you.