love sucks

[sweetest17sin]

This love thing kinda sucks
It like...controls your life
Grr...it makes me so mad
Best friends become enemies
Love turns into hate
Your world comes crashing down
All because...
All because of this love thing
Why does it have to much power though?
This emotion that’s so strong
Maybe it’s because...
Maybe it’s because the base of it is at your heart
And your heart is so very fragile
One wrong word said...and
Apart it falls
Into hundreds of tiny pieces
That slowly are put back together
But now...
Now it’s even more fragile than before
And just when you feel the right person comes along
The one who will make everything alright
They break it too
And it hurts worse this time
I guess you can just never win
It’ll always be there
Controlling your every move
Just waiting...
Waiting for it’s attack

[bloodredtears]

i totally know this feeling! you express it wonderfully...this is my fav part

One wrong word said...and
Apart it falls
Into hundreds of tiny pieces

i know that most of all...i really felt it when i read it!

[Chaotic_Thetis]

Hmm, certainly upfront and truthful about the matter, some parts felt uneccessary in way that i don't personally feel that it did the poem any favours, such as "grr". However, regardless it may of course seem differently to you and with that in mind, it's a nice write.

[SilverEyes]

sweetest17sin said:

It’ll always be there
Controlling your every move
Just waiting...
Waiting for it’s attack

I love those lines and the Grr makes the poem seem more alive, not just words on paper.

[amberputis]

good use of expressions here..theres so much truth in this.

[sweetest17sin]

thanks everyone...i wrote this a while ago...i forgot about the grrr...lol, but i think it adds feeling to the poem..