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Post by bloodredtears on Mar 31, 2004 19:29:16 GMT -5
hmmm...very full of imagery...i'm not sure about the ending...it's an interesting way to end it, but it kind of confused me....maybe if i read it again....but, anyway, great job!
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Post by Mikepoet on Mar 31, 2004 22:24:01 GMT -5
It's a moment I wanted to share with a lady that I was her bath servant..All she had to do was bath and I tended to her needs so she did not have to get out of tub..Most ladies like chocolaes and I had found a chocolate orange and it was in the poem.. Never asked the lady though..Sad..
What I had meant by the ending was the tub had overflowed and her breath escaped a bubble from her sighing from tub overflow. The bubble floated across room and mirrored her bathing and then it landed on a plate of chocolate treats.
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Post by ::..::FoX::..:: on Apr 1, 2004 14:33:51 GMT -5
Dude I love this write, Mike, you have such a sensual way with your words man!
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Post by Mikepoet on Apr 1, 2004 15:17:49 GMT -5
Thank you. I would one day like to make a living at this. Although I feel that the day of the romantic poet plying his talent to exist have past. I like it here. Some sites the people do not speak much and the site mooves slow. Here it seems to be some poetry readers who often read. Thats cool.  |
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Post by Mikepoet on Apr 2, 2004 13:09:37 GMT -5
Sorry I deleted and it only deleted my post.
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