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Embrace
Mar 4, 2004 19:43:48 GMT -5
Post by Burning Innocence on Mar 4, 2004 19:43:48 GMT -5
The wind calls
whispering softly
I'm grabbing and pulling
the hole is deep
nothing can hurt like this
but this is my pain
my stars are black
my sun faded
I leaned on you but nothing comes of this
I scratch
hoping you'd feel this
I hurt
yet I smile
I see in your eyes
something pure and real
tears
salty and hot
I feel the tug
I see through gray
in my safe place
I lie crying, embraced in your wings
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amberputis
Virtuoso
~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
Posts: 330
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Embrace
Mar 7, 2004 12:18:12 GMT -5
Post by amberputis on Mar 7, 2004 12:18:12 GMT -5
a rather interesting write, well done
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Embrace
Mar 10, 2004 16:16:58 GMT -5
Post by John Barnett on Mar 10, 2004 16:16:58 GMT -5
Very good job.
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sweetest17sin
Virtuoso
don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile!
Posts: 252
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Embrace
Mar 11, 2004 22:54:25 GMT -5
Post by sweetest17sin on Mar 11, 2004 22:54:25 GMT -5
nice job. you did a real nice job capturing the moment in this poem.
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Embrace
Mar 14, 2004 10:22:55 GMT -5
Post by T.J. Barber on Mar 14, 2004 10:22:55 GMT -5
Great Job! I agree with the rest of the gang. This was great. The momentum of the piece captured my attention. Also, good job capturing the true essence of the poem.
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