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Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Feb 27, 2004 8:48:58 GMT -5
not my best work but hey, its love... not very good on that topic.
There's always been this place I wanted to go to you told me that you'd take me there I believed every word that you said to me but was I too blind to have not seen through your lies?
When things didn't turn out the way they were planned promises were broken and excuses were made How can I live like this through every waking minute of my life when you promised me heaven but instead gave me hell
You gave me hope that lasted for a lifetime but the thing I needed most was the thing you neglected I can't seem to find it even though how hard I try forsaken and afraid, my heart can no longer stand the pain
I asked myself why I couldn't leave you The answer that I was looking for was the love I was longing for the love that I needed to be the reason for my existence and it was your love that made heaven and hell collide
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Eclipse
Apprentice
It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time.
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Post by Eclipse on Feb 27, 2004 11:11:57 GMT -5
i liked how you tied the title into the last line. lovely write.
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Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Feb 27, 2004 11:36:37 GMT -5
ooh!!! thankies again!!
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 27, 2004 19:08:28 GMT -5
i like the title too...the entire piece was wonderful...great job!
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Post by SilverEyes on Feb 28, 2004 0:14:47 GMT -5
I can relate to this piece. You expressed it very well. Nice write.
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sweetest17sin
Virtuoso
don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile!
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Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 28, 2004 2:34:55 GMT -5
i really liked it. i think you did a fine job. if this is one of your worse poems then you are an amazing writer...cuz you're good poems must be extravegant.
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