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Post by Tempest on Feb 13, 2004 18:10:11 GMT -5

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Beneath the icy surface of the river she lies
Caught, carried amongst swift currents
Escape met in bitter, futile end
As hope dims,
Currents ever growing stronger.
Drifting, all decisions pre-made by this raging river,
Leading surely to death.
Scarred arms reaching up,
Begging for the surface
Only just out of reach of slender hands,
Desperately wanting to be free of this frigid soon-to-be grave.
Strong hands plunge into the cold waters,
Firmly grasping ones of the girl
Gathering her into strong arms of a protective embrace, so warm and safe
Lips meet in frenzied passion,
Giving life into a body once dead;
Awakening a lost soul.
Her savior,
Her love.

SilverEyes Poet Laureate Silver eyes crying crimson tears. Posts: 609	Savior Feb 13, 2004 23:38:27 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by SilverEyes on Feb 13, 2004 23:38:27 GMT -5 Great ending and wonderful imagery.
	You know I'm dying to live Until I'm ready I'm ready to die ~Jonny Lang~

bloodredtears Legend I don't entirely think I've had enough rum to allow that kind of talk. Posts: 1,164	Savior Feb 14, 2004 3:15:13 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by bloodredtears on Feb 14, 2004 3:15:13 GMT -5 beautiful imagery...great ending for sure..unfortunately strong, silent, loving warriors aren't very common anymore... still, i loved it!
	Poetry copyright of Bloodredtears Summer has flown its nest, as the days swiftly turn to fall and we start to roost in the bosom of winter.

amberputis Virtuoso ~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~ Posts: 330	Savior Feb 15, 2004 15:47:54 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by amberputis on Feb 15, 2004 15:47:54 GMT -5 job well done, i loved the story in this, ending was fabulous!
	Amber

sweetest17sin Virtuoso don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile! Posts: 252	Savior Feb 15, 2004 20:49:56 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 15, 2004 20:49:56 GMT -5 i agree w/ silvereyes...awesome job!
	somewhere there's someone who dreams of your smile and finds in your presence that life is worthwhile, so when you are lonely remember it's true; somebody, somewhere is thinking of you!

richie Virtuoso Posts: 302	Savior Feb 19, 2004 7:08:21 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by richie on Feb 19, 2004 7:08:21 GMT -5 good writing here, well crafted poem regards Richie
	from childhood's hour I have not been as others were-I have not seen as others saw-I could not bring my passions from a common spring from the same sourse I have not taken my sorrow: I could not awaken my heart to joy at the same tone and all I loved I loved alone.

Chaotic_Thetis Apprentice Bleed me! For i have witnessed yet remained silent.Slay me! For i had your love and kept it. Posts: 142	Savior Feb 19, 2004 15:59:44 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Feb 19, 2004 15:59:44 GMT -5 Feels more like a well crafted draught for a romance story, reminds me partly of the "Tempest" by shakespeare. Only partly mind you. It seems well thought out with rather good imagery. Shows a lot of talent, keep it up.
	A woman who choses the writing profession often does so as to give herself a rank within a male-dominated society

JosephScottMorris Apprentice Posts: 157	Savior Feb 24, 2004 21:26:41 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by JosephScottMorris on Feb 24, 2004 21:26:41 GMT -5 A great poem! ;DJoe

sweetest17sin Virtuoso don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile! Posts: 252	Savior Feb 24, 2004 23:20:52 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 24, 2004 23:20:52 GMT -5 awesome job. it was beautiful from beginning to end.
	somewhere there's someone who dreams of your smile and finds in your presence that life is worthwhile, so when you are lonely remember it's true; somebody, somewhere is thinking of you!

Tempest Guest	Savior Feb 25, 2004 8:21:16 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Back to Top Post by Tempest on Feb 25, 2004 8:21:16 GMT -5 Hey everyone! Thanks so much for all the sweet reviews. They are very much appreciated, especially since they are from other awesome writers. Hugs to each of ya! Much love, Tempest

Eclipse Apprentice It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time. Posts: 222	Savior Feb 25, 2004 16:01:41 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Eclipse on Feb 25, 2004 16:01:41 GMT -5 i liked this also. the imagery in it is great.
	You saw what you get If you take what you take. Look in the eyes of the test. It's all because... Now there's a feeling I get. When I look to the left. But we can never be sensed. Our searching for a sign.

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Post by amberputis on Feb 15, 2004 15:47:54 GMT -5

Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 15, 2004 20:49:56 GMT -5

Post by richie on Feb 19, 2004 7:08:21 GMT -5

Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Feb 19, 2004 15:59:44 GMT -5

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Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 24, 2004 23:20:52 GMT -5

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