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Post by Sathien on Feb 10, 2004 10:54:56 GMT -5
If only I had the time I’d write you a poem I’d tell of the color of your eyes And how it captures the world In its beauty and splendor The majesty that spring brings That leaves me in awe I’d tell of the perfect bow Your lips are mold into And the words they have uttered The arrows they have shot That wound and heal my heart
If only I had the time I’d sing you a song I’d sing of the angelic voices I hear whenever you speak And the whisper of the wind And the echoes of the waves Caught within the pretty shell I’d sing of the praises Meant for you only No deity can grasp No god can understand None but you in your realm
If only I had the time I’d offer you more I’d kiss you forever In a warm embrace And bathe you with smiles Tender breath on your cheeks Soft silky touches I’d paint you a world Where you and I lay In a sea of gold and amber Gazing at a delightful future Woven across the horizon
If only I had the time I’d give you all these But now I’m too caught up With everything else That I forget all those I see, I hear, I feel In you, in me, in us I forget all the other times The song, the poem, the praises The kiss and the warm embrace You and I and the promises Would never be felt nor painted
Because at this moment All I have Is all Except time
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 10, 2004 13:33:03 GMT -5
very interesting piece...very beautifully written...i loved the opening lines especially...great job!
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Post by SilverEyes on Feb 10, 2004 19:10:12 GMT -5
Yes, definitely a wonderful write and a a reminder to take a break from the fast lane.
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Eclipse
Apprentice
It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time.
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Post by Eclipse on Feb 10, 2004 20:13:51 GMT -5
oh how romantic! And what a lovely title. It fits this work quite nicely. Beautiful piece. ^.^
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sweetest17sin
Virtuoso
don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile!
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Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 12, 2004 0:42:03 GMT -5
nice job...it was a different type of poem than i am used to reading, but i really liked it!
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Post by Sathien on Feb 12, 2004 6:03:41 GMT -5
thank you to those who reviewed. appreciated them kind words.
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amberputis
Virtuoso
~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
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Post by amberputis on Feb 13, 2004 12:15:40 GMT -5
wow- very different indeed (from what im used to reading) this was very sweet, i liked it very much.
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Post by Sathien on Feb 13, 2004 21:31:52 GMT -5
thanks!
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