pig
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Post by pig on Feb 4, 2004 17:57:02 GMT -5
red, blush, tea. take me out into the garden and sit and drink with me, we'll remember things forgotten as the day turns easily to night as sky's light becomes the colours of blossom on fire.
i think i'll stay a while.
red blush tea. red surrounds the senses as the blood flows to the skin, she blushes there for me, a perfect satin cheek. as i hold onto things i cannot see. i slow my speech, for red blush tea, and in the hope that you'll speak to me.
red blush tea aroma round my waking moments making fun of me, of everything i want to see. Talking through the midday haze she turns to me and softly lays a hand upon my cheek, and kisses me with lips that taste with a hint of divinity, a hint of red blush tea. the taste i wish to taste again and then for eternity.
red blush tea.
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 4, 2004 19:00:13 GMT -5
this was a very good poem...are the three words supposed to remain separate or is there really a red blush tea??? great job!
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Post by SilverEyes on Feb 4, 2004 19:31:22 GMT -5
This was a gorgeous write. I can't wait to read your others.
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Post by serenepoetress on Feb 5, 2004 0:50:56 GMT -5
this piece stirs the senses... an extremely well crafted poem!
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Post by John Barnett on Feb 5, 2004 14:53:50 GMT -5
I really enjoyed this piece as well, very good. Welcome to Poet Club pig, thanks for sharing your work. I hope you enjoy your stay.
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pig
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Post by pig on Feb 5, 2004 15:37:47 GMT -5
well, thank you all for reading. i will certainly stick around and post. im just happy that my work has an audience.
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amberputis
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~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
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Post by amberputis on Feb 18, 2004 0:30:26 GMT -5
[glow=red,2,300]Again, another poem of yours that i really loved, please keep posting, i am verrry interested in reading more, you are one of my most favorite poets on this site![/glow]
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Post by richie on Feb 18, 2004 13:49:31 GMT -5
this is fine writing, I enjoyed reading it shows good sense of the poetic craft, the only small nit is I would use cap "I" throughout. excellent. Richie.
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Post by T.J. Barber on Feb 18, 2004 14:07:43 GMT -5
Hey pig this was a great write. This was much better. Great write! Keep it up!
Tj
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Eclipse
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It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time.
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Post by Eclipse on Feb 18, 2004 16:56:17 GMT -5
oh wow this is very beautiful.
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