somaybeitsme
Novice
"I have my eyes and you have your eyes to see completely two different things"
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Post by somaybeitsme on Jan 2, 2004 1:29:35 GMT -5
The Sky is Falling
Rainy day In December The smell of you On my favorite shirt. One tear Falls On your silver skin Shivering To the gripping Tight clench Of my cold hand. One kiss On weeping eyelashes Is all I want. Lightning strikes Roaring thunder The tumbling clash Of sound waves Breaking the barrier of love. I read it in a book once A book I couldn’t put down Every word captivated me Into a oblivious trance Of temporary happiness Like the happiness That echoes To my heart Every time you touch me Finger move Hand numb Sweaty palms Clinging to the arm Of the ugly green couch Hidden underneath a beautiful Blue silk cover, I know you’re scared. Fear screaming in A nervous laugh Chuckling from your soul Each time You hear the word love Come out of my mouth. Words I never knew existed Indescribable Tranquility bleeding On a wilted flower Given to me A hundred times By people Who wanted to suck out all the nectar, The sweet beauty, Out of something So precious and priceless. The very smell of you Leaking on my Nectar. Its raining In December And I didn’t even know it.
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Post by bloodredtears on Jan 7, 2004 12:23:18 GMT -5
wow...that was a pretty intriguing piece...very well done!
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Post by SilverEyes on Jan 15, 2004 18:48:47 GMT -5
Very nice and beautiful imagery.
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Post by shadowling on Jan 17, 2004 12:54:09 GMT -5
Lovely nicely writen
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Eclipse
Apprentice
It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time.
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Post by Eclipse on Jan 29, 2004 18:47:47 GMT -5
the first couple lines
Rainy day In December The smell of you On my favorite shirt
they really ignited my senses. i love how you wrapped this piece up. brilliant ending.
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Post by John Barnett on Jan 29, 2004 19:27:54 GMT -5
Great imagery, well done.
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sweetest17sin
Virtuoso
don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile!
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Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 15, 2004 20:44:30 GMT -5
yeah, wow...that was really good.
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Post by richie on Feb 19, 2004 7:10:29 GMT -5
I enjoyed this too, performance poetry, have you tried saying it aload. regards Richie.
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Post by JosephScottMorris on Feb 23, 2004 2:50:44 GMT -5
I enjoyed reading this poem, have you tried other formats with this one? ;DJoe
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